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Old 07-07-2008, 03:12 AM
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Originally Posted by SpacemanSpiff View Post
Thanks for all the feedback, guys!

Here's a couple more (they sound more rhymey with the music!):

The Wait
Justin Shaffer

I lie awake and think of you
And all the things that we could do
And when I finally drift to sleep
It's you that I see in my dreams

(Chorus)
I don't know who you are
I don't know where you are
I don't know what you are
But I know that you are
I don't know why I haven't found you yet
But I'll keep looking, that much you can bet

(Chorus)

I know that I can't have you now
But we'll find each other, some way, somehow
I know that we'll meet someday
But I'll keep living along the way

(Chorus x2)

(Chorus x2)

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What It's About
Justin Shaffer

He was sitting on a park bench in New York
Watching as the children played
Thinking of his life and of Heaven
And of how maybe it's not so far away

He pulled the razor out of his pocket
His life was getting worse by the day
But just as he'd gained the courage to do it
A girl's reflection shone in the blade

She said, "What ya doing there, mister?
Don't you know that thing's not a toy?
You could really hurt somebody
What would your mother say?"

Stunned, he just sat there in silence
And watched as the girl ran away
He hadn't thought at all of his mother
He couldn't imagine what she'd have said

Did this girl know he was in trouble?
Or was she some kind of sign from above?
Because of her he put down the razor
To live for the ones he loved

Sometimes this world seems so crazy
That there's no way out
But life is always worth living
If you know what it's about

It's not about war, greed, or power
Or how much oil is burned
It's about the people who love you
And the ones you love in return
I like them both. I suggest that you make the first song 'the wait', have more verses/ make it longer. And the second one.. i love. If you gave me that poem a year ago, i would've stopped way before. (: Very realistic poems. <3 - Lana
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