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Old 06-26-2008, 08:13 PM
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Default My horrid poetry. :] Add some of yours if you want ^^

Okay. Well..I write a lot when I'm pissed...Or depressed..or just reflective. So here are some of my poems.

This one is for my ex.
We met at a concert.
Dated for about three months
And then he pulled something
I never thought plausible.
I called him and his girlfriend answered.
And he got on the phone and told me
that I was just a part of his game.
He said that he would miss me,
and that he liked me..but he
liked her more.

You can see why this would make me mad, no?

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Birds of a Feather

You’re not worth these tears I cry
You’re not worth the sun or sky
You’re not worth how hard I tried.
You’re not worth it, you’re not worth it.

You never deserved what I felt
You didn’t deserve the way I knelt
I don’t care that you like her more.
Because you’re such a fucking bore

You only deserve the scum she is
You only deserve that fucking bitch
She’s a whore. You know it, too
So, now I’m glad I’m not with you.

You weren’t worth the tears I cried
Not worth at all how hard I tried.
But now I see you for who you are.
And I don’t know how we got that far.

I think that you are perfect together
Because now you can lie together
Because now you can cheat together
Two of a kind. Birds of a feather.
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Old 06-26-2008, 08:20 PM
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Yep. so. Constructive criticism is helpful!
I know I'm not that good. But I try, and sometimes it turns out okay. :]

Here are a few more ^^

Only Human

People suck.
People think about themselves,
And never about others.
People suck.

People are mean.
They don’t care about how your day went,
Because their day sucked.
People are mean.

People are stupid.
They don’t understand feelings,
Love, lust, hatred.
People are stupid.

People are judgmental.
They think you’re a certain way
Just by what you look like.
People are judgmental.

People are scary.
They murder, rob, and rape,
And they don’t think twice about it.
People are scary.

People make mistakes.
They’ll do something wrong.
And either hate themselves for it,
Or not even care.
People make mistakes.

People suck.
People are mean.
People are stupid.
People are judgmental.
People are scary.
People make mistakes.
But most of all,
People are…
Only human.

That Day in September

We all remember
That day in September
When the skies were
Clouded with smoke.

But with dramas and shows
And movies that blow
They’re making this seem
The whole thing’s a joke.

Not funny completely
But I’m laughing discreetly
For pop culture is making
This seem way too huge

Ground Zero sits there
And too much of us care
Those movies are making
The U.S. their stooge

But are we forgetting
(And that, I am betting)
That 9/11 went on
Five years ago?

Well, we’ll always remember
That day in September
But can we please stop
Wallowing in misery and woe?


(OKAY.. FOR THE LATTER OF THE TWO. I AM NOT SAYING THAT 9/11 SHOULD NOT BE REMEMBERED OR SHOULD NOT BE CARED ABOUT. I am just saying that people are STILL freaking about it. I mean, I know it was a horrible event, and many many innocent people were killed, but it's been like..Seven or so years. Calm the hell down, people! >_< )
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You're looking at it from a selfish point of view.
If you think of the families that had to deal with losing someone that day, it is still going on for them, and it always will, until they die; Every single day is a reminder of all the people who were killed.
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It's okay.
I've seen better.
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You shouldn't try too hard with rhyming.
Sometimes, it's better if you don't.
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You're looking at it from a selfish point of view.
If you think of the families that had to deal with losing someone that day, it is still going on for them, and it always will, until they die; Every single day is a reminder of all the people who were killed.
Even with death..you shouldn't keep wallowing about it.

So many people in my life have died.. even if it wasn't in a huge event like 9/11, I still miss them.

But I don't constantly freak about it. I've come to accept that shit happens >_<
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Good point.
Unfortunately, it's not that easy. I'm sure they want to let it go, but it's not something you can just snap your fingers and get over.
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True that.

I know it's not an immediate thing. Getting over death = not that easy.

But in what...seven years? I think they can get past bringing it up all the time.

>_<

And I'm fine with the families still mourning their losses.They don't post it on Fox News.

But I'm pissed at our government for STILL milking 9/11 for all it's worth.
They're using the fear of another terrorist attack to get us to do whatever the hell they want.

Not cool.
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That's the point of terrorism sweetie.
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I KNOW!

JEEZ >___<

the poem is just freaking saying that, as Americans, we should stop fugging wallowing in all the shit that happened seven years ago.

I'm not trying to say "Down With the Government!" or "People Need To Stop Remembering 9/11" or even "Don't Fear Another Terrorist Attack"

It's just saying stop posting damn memorials on TV and shit.

It pisses me off.
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