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Old 10-19-2007, 11:51 AM
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You can see the lies within her face.
You can see the silence when she stands and watches you cry.
Childhood ended when you felt the fingers on your skin...
Her nails were like a blade.
Her words were like falling decay.

Felt your body disappearing
rendering your dreams.
Open up your eyes:
She's really here though you can't see.

You think about her precious smile
and feel the leather on her skin.
Your skin against her bloody mask.
Innocence is lost forever.
You dream about her shining eyes,
bleeding fingers and her body.
Going on your lips are sealed
so your mouth won't scream again.

I'm encoding shapes to make illusions of my soul.
Every time you breathe equals too many years I lose.
Screams are burning down and tears are dripping on the floor
Where deeper dust and spiders keep me wanting so much more.
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Old 10-19-2007, 12:51 PM
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Wow, that's really good.
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Old 10-19-2007, 01:07 PM
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Thank you!
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Very deep, I like. Only thing is, it seems like prose written in the form of poetry.
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Old 03-10-2008, 08:13 AM
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I think you mean its like prose-poetry, which is a form of poetry.
Emotive with some original touches.
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